Quicksand Fans

The Rules:
You write a stanza, or perhaps a short page, as if Dr Seuss were to read it on stage.
Remember, be brief! You aren't writing a book, just a piece of a puzzle. How big? We'll soon look!
It could start with a letter, it could look like a lime. What's important are things sinky, in rhyme.
By way of example, if I don't offend, I'll throw out two stanzas. Please, do amend!


Q is for quicksand
You'd best hold your breath
For sinking in this
Could lead to your death!

Beware of the tarpit!
Though squishy and fun,
See how Elizabeth
Sank down to her bun!

With no one around and no rope in sight
I begin to sink deeper
Then struggle and fight

I'm up to my neck now
I'm starting to choke
"I'm sinking in quicksand"
Were the last words I spoke

Palinov Jensen wrote:With no one around and no rope in sight
I begin to sink deeper
Then struggle and fight

I'm up to my neck now
I'm starting to choke
"I'm sinking in quicksand"
Were the last words I spoke

Your rhyme is quite rhymey,
I'm sure all will concede.
Though you're sinking in quicksand
Right down to your need.

That line's not a typo,
But a reference quite old
It dates back to the time
of Kaol's SInkin' Hole.

Chimerix wrote:

Palinov Jensen wrote:With no one around and no rope in sight
I begin to sink deeper
Then struggle and fight

I'm up to my neck now
I'm starting to choke
"I'm sinking in quicksand"
Were the last words I spoke

Your rhyme is quite rhymey,
I'm sure all will concede.
Though you're sinking in quicksand
Right down to your need.

That line's not a typo,
But a reference quite old
It dates back to the time
of Kaol's SInkin' Hole.

You're sinking in quicksand
Now full of emotion
If you survive this ordeal
I'll push you in quick lotion!


Okay, that was awful, but I thought it was funny and I'm having fun too!

I'm stuck to my chest in a pond of red clay
Though it looks like a mess
I enjoy its caress
And I hope to get out by the end of the day

Look! There! in the mire
A damsel is sinking!
"No time to lose"
is what I am thinking...

I do not quicksand
It's all messy, like goo
You sink where you stand
Mmm, changed my mind... OooooOOOH

I did try my hand at a funny quicksand poem a while back... didn't get much of a response though!

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..aaaaaand it looks like I've killed this thread too!

tanya_wam wrote:..aaaaaand it looks like I've killed this thread too!

Eh, not really. From the get-go, this was one of the dumbest premises for a thread this board's had in a while, which is already a pretty low bar.