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Listen To Your Friends

Postby 101927700 » Mon Jan 05, 2015 4:30 pm

McKenna was a trained fisher girl, growing up by Anchorage, Alaska. She had been fishing with her dad for nearly 15 years.

Today was her 20th birthday. She decided to visit the local glacier, and test her chest waders in the mud. When she had told her friends about the plan, they told her not to, that she would get stuck. But she shrugged it off as a myth. She packed her waders into a bag, and drove off for the glacier mud.

McKenna drove down the final dirt road to reach the glacial mudflat. It truly was massive. She parked her car, and put on her chest waders. They were warm and insulated as the climate required. She headed down the hill, and reached the edge of the mud.

The mud's surface refused to break under McKenna's waders until she reached the middle of the mud. Her foot sank right in, up to her knee. The other foot soon followed. She tried to lift her foot up, but nothing happened. She tried the other foot. Same result.

McKenna tried digging with her hands, but the mud wouldn't let her hands go in. The surface tension was too high. And she couldn't feel a bottom. But she wasn't sinking... until she tried to kneel down. This broke the internal tension, and McKenna started sinking. The mud was super thick, and she couldn't even move in it. Eventually, she reached thigh-deep. Her feet were getting a bit cold from the mud, but she thought nothing of it. McKenna could also feel the pressure of the mud on her legs. It was a bit uncomfortable, but bearable. She tried to get out again, but once again she found her legs fixed in place. McKenna was well and truly stuck in the glacial mud.

McKenna tried to bend over, but as soon as she did, she sank again. She felt the incredible pressure of the mud close around her lower woman area, making her feel weird. Then, the mud climbed to her waist. She found herself unable to lean over, and by now her feet were no longer dropping in temperature, but they were cold. Her stomach felt weird due to the mud pressure. At this point, McKenna called out for help.

"Help me! Please! Anyone! I'm stuck waist deep in thick-as-shit glacial mud!" McKenna exclaimed. But there was no answer. But she did sink deeper. The cold mud slowly climbed up her lower body, threatening to overflow her waders.

"Oh god please, please, please don't let my waders overflow, I realize the mistake I made now," pleaded McKenna. But her prayers were not answered. As if the mud had heard her, she sank deeper and deeper. Eventually, the mud's surface tension was the only thing keeping her dry and clean.

"Oh god, what do I do? My friends were right about this mud! I should've listened to them! Now my only hope is to press on this mud. Ah, never mind. It'll be futile. Might as well take advantage of this situation to tweet about it! Let's see... tweet... hmm, how to word this... I know! 'Stuck in chest waders in chest-deep glacial mud. In case I never get out and die, I want you all to know... I left this world following what I thought was right. -McKenna.' Perfect! Now to pray for my life..." But this round of prayers would not result in anything good.

"...and may you divinely lift me out of this mud. I may be an atheist, but at this point only prayer will save me," said McKenna. But her prayers once again went unanswered, but misinterpreted by the mud. McKenna sank deeper, over the tops of her chest waders. The mud felt as thick as molasses. But it was a rather temperate temperature. The mud was so thick that it didn't want to enter McKenna's waders, but gravity dictated that it did. And so McKenna felt her waders slowly fill up with thick glacial mud. At this point, McKenna sent out one final tweet saying: Waders filling with this thick mud. Pray for me.

McKenna's waders were filled to the top with the thickest mud in the world. At this point, McKenna was weak from her struggles - and still sinking. She let out a squeak of half arousal half fear as the mud started to climb around her breasts. But she ignored the strong internal desire to have an orgasm. Her breasts provided as nice buoys, and she was no longer sinking. But she really wanted to get out, to prove to her friends that she was right. Unfortunately for her, she would never get the chance.

McKenna put her hands on the mud one more time, and surprisingly, she actually lifted up an inch. But her waders were so weighed down with glacial mud that she couldn't hold up any longer. She lifted her hands, and she sank to her shoulders, sinking a millimeter a second. There was no hope for her now.

McKenna was deeply stuck in Alaskan glacial mud up to her shoulders. Her waders were swamped with the mud, and her clothes were trashed. She tried to move, but this only loosened more mud under her feet, and McKenna sank to her chin. It was becoming difficult for her to breathe due to the weight of mud on her chest. She accepted she was going to drown, and shook her head, causing the mud to loosen and her head to go under.

Beneath the mud, it was hard for McKenna to hold her breath due to the pressure. She knew her hair was visible on the surface. But eventually she fell to the mud, opening her mouth and releasing her last breath. She slowly faded away....

2,500 years later...

Johann Jovez was exploring a cave in his brand new Nano-Suit, which enabled him to have infinite oxygen and basically be immortal. He was looking at an ancient glacial mud deposit, when he encountered a fossilized skeleton in the rock. He dug it out, and probed the skeletons preserved DNA, and found something truly astounding. The skeleton was of a 20 year old girl who had died January 5, 2015. Little did he know that these were the remnants of McKenna's body. The end.

I constructed this story from what I know about Alaskan glacier mud and from learning from my previous stories. It usually takes around an hour and a half to write a story, but my story, "Tirah and Abigail: A Story of Waders in a Bog", known in the community for involving two girls pooping in their mud-filled waders, took a week to write, slowly bringing plot elements together. Sometime during the week I will post a tutorial about how to write my kind of story.

Thanks for reading,
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Re: Listen To Your Friends

Postby Ace » Mon Jan 05, 2015 8:59 pm

101927700 wrote:Sometime during the week I will post a tutorial about how to write my kind of story.


I'm just genuinely curious as to what compels someone with a whole two months worth of experience under their belt to suddenly play the role of professor. And I don't mean to just single out 101927700 here; I've seen it many times in the past, usually more often with art than with fiction writing, but still the same basic concept.

EDIT: Also, I feel like I should point out that Twitter has a 140 character maximum. The first tweet you had the character write is 171 characters long.

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Re: Listen To Your Friends

Postby bart1997 » Mon Jan 05, 2015 11:27 pm

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Re: Listen To Your Friends

Postby bart1997 » Mon Jan 05, 2015 11:33 pm

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Re: Listen To Your Friends

Postby Viridian » Tue Jan 06, 2015 1:01 pm

Ace wrote:I'm just genuinely curious as to what compels someone with a whole two months worth of experience under their belt to suddenly play the role of professor...I've seen it many times in the past, usually more often with art than with fiction writing, but still the same basic concept.

I'm fascinated by this as well. There's an element of "power", in my opinion. The reason for this is that this is a very specific niche interest, which means very few people specialise in, let alone even go near. There *is* a demand, and with few "suppliers", it's actually not that hard for someone to quickly establish themselves in the scene as an "expert" after relatively little experience.

In my short time as a quicksand-themed artist, I've opened up to requests on dA - and I've nearly regretted it immediately. The "demand" is very specific, and often obsessive. You're combining something that is already specific (quicksand) with something else that is very specific (skin-tight suits, bandages, an original character, boots that must be this high, scenarios that involve being stuck at a specific depth, velociraptors [I'm not kidding with this one; that's my latest request]). Some people really, really, really want to see their specific, unique fantasy that they are willing to pay people to draw it out for them.

And they do.

Whether it's virtual currency or real money, budding, journeyman artists with a quicksand interest get commissions for these very specific scenarios - and because no one else will accept them (more serious, professional artists seldom accept this kind of commission for various reasons), they essentially have a monopoly in this field. And when you're raking in a few dollars for a pen-and-pencil sketch, it doesn't matter if you've had any art training, that accomplishment gets to you. People are paying you to fulfill their requests. Quality doesn't matter. With basic skills and basic tools, they can generate any scenario the commissioner wants and they'll get their $2 or equivalent. As long as people are making requests and are willing to pay, that will continue to happen.

There are, of course, people with the professional or professional-level skills that do a great job of producing quality work, and there are journeyman hobbyist artists who just enjoy doing a sketch and sharing their work. Neither of these are likely to get big-headed about their skills and achievements. Then there are those who accept any request regardless of skill or quality. I'm not saying they shouldn't feel good about themselves, but in the scope of why some artists may feel like they're in a position to provide "instruction", the fact that there are so few artists in this specific field may give them the impression that they can elevate themselves to that level.

I personally would rather learn to do my own illustrations than to pay someone else to do a low-quality job, but that's another story.

It's also worth noting that there are, perhaps, two regular contributors to the story forum, and it's rather easy to flood the front page.
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Re: Listen To Your Friends

Postby Viridian » Tue Jan 06, 2015 1:31 pm

101927700 wrote:I constructed this story from what I know about Alaskan glacier mud and from learning from my previous stories. It usually takes around an hour and a half to write a story, but my story, "Tirah and Abigail: A Story of Waders in a Bog", known in the community for involving two girls pooping in their mud-filled waders, took a week to write, slowly bringing plot elements together. Sometime during the week I will post a tutorial about how to write my kind of story.

I'd like to share some experience and advice from one writer to another.

When I started writing, I had a tendency to pump out stories very quickly. Short and simple, plop and sink, not dissimilar to your stories, and would take roughly the same amount of time. I still have these stories, but I don't share them on this forum because they are far below the quality benchmark I've set myself. In fact, I would now consider them no more as vignettes that I could write up for a drawing than standalone stories. In more recent times, though I still feel like I'm a prolific writer, there's been a huge shift to quality over quantity. In 2014 I submitted six stories. In 2013, eight. 2012, three. My personal stories folder has over 100 files dating to 2007. In just over a month you've submitted more stories than I have in a year. One thing we often see in new, rapid-fire authors is that they burn out very quickly. Slow down, take the time to think of new ideas that push your creative writing boundaries rather than flinging large numbers of stories.

I'm curious what you would put in your tutorial. Your stories are rather simple - I don't mind this in a demeaning way, but in terms of technique and structure, they are very straightforward. Personally, I'd rather see you hone your skills and experiment with different content and styles before doing a tutorial. It took me over seven years of reading and writing before I even thought about putting together my compilation of notes ( http://www.quicksandfans.com/bb/viewtopic.php?f=14&t=10067 - have you read this, out of curiosity?). It took more time to put that thread together than you've been writing.

Before writing a guide, I'd like to see you "learn" more from your stories. Although you've opened your threads for comments, there's an unwritten rule where people won't actually give you a critique unless you specifically ask for one. If you ask for comments, you'll get praise, but you generally won't get critical feedback out of respect for your contribution. If you're serious about learning and hearing about the good and the bad parts of your writing, I'm happy to engage in that dialogue.
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Re: Listen To Your Friends

Postby Viridian » Tue Jan 06, 2015 6:58 pm

I've noticed that you have a habit of providing commentary on each of your stories. This is a good thing to walk through your thought processes in a "think out loud" kind of way. If you, are anyone else, are interested, I'd be happy to do a commentary on some of my stories to show how I develop my work.
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Re: Listen To Your Friends

Postby Kimalainen » Mon Dec 21, 2015 5:48 am

Oh my god. Whatever the fuck this is that I just read. I don't know why someone would enjoy reading about such a death, let alone that they should have died long before that much suffering.

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Re: Listen To Your Friends

Postby 101927700 » Mon Dec 21, 2015 6:11 am

Kimalainen wrote:Oh my god. Whatever the fuck this is that I just read. I don't know why someone would enjoy reading about such a death, let alone that they should have died long before that much suffering.

Just removed that part and replaced it with something less... descriptive. Been meaning to remove that for ages but never got around to it.
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Re: Listen To Your Friends

Postby Jon Smith » Tue Dec 22, 2015 7:38 am

Kim's right. Also there was the same thing with "Big Breasts can be Deadly".


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