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[101927700]

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[Viridian]

I'm not going to critique this, but two things stuck out to me.

In an alternate universe, Elsa has mud powers, not ice powers.

One might question why you would even set this up as a Frozen story. You don't use the characters in a distinguishing way, and you're effectively creating a new character with mud powers, so why not be original? I seldom create fan-fiction because I find that my take on the characters is original enough for me to actually create an original story - perhaps inspired by the source material in my mind, but not a direct use of the source material on paper. Taking Elsa's ice powers - without any explanation - defeats the whole purpose of using the Frozen setting. Like writing a Lion King fanfiction, except making Simba a gazelle.

Fanfiction can be a nasty field to work with because you risk upsetting fans of the source material for unfaithfully representing the characters and themes. I doubt there are hardcore Frozen fans on this forum that would be upset by this. I did once write a Soul Calibur fanfic and that got hammered by another author who was furious at my portrayal of a series he was very fond of. It caused a bit of a kerfuffle on DeepSinking, and I've refused to re-post the story since.

She decided that it was probably over for her, that she would drown. So, she decided to take a nap.

...why would someone accepting their imminent death...take a nap?

I'm curious if you read through the feedback given to you. It seems that with all your work, you go through a cycle of create-hate-regret-delete. I spend more time writing up critique for you because you ask for it than you do writing the stories, and I haven't received an acknowledgement that you've even read through it. My honest opinion would be considered taboo (but if you really want to know, PM me), so I'm trying to be constructive and helping you polish your work. I won't waste my time if this is not something you actually want.

[DaegonNeo]

I spend more time writing up critique for you because you ask for it than you do writing the stories, and I haven't received an acknowledgement that you've even read through it. My honest opinion would be considered taboo (but if you really want to know, PM me), so I'm trying to be constructive and helping you polish your work. I won't waste my time if this is not something you actually want.

Well, I for one happen to enjoy reading the critique, so if nobody else, you have at least one avid reader.

[Ace]

I spend more time writing up critique for you because you ask for it than you do writing the stories, and I haven't received an acknowledgement that you've even read through it. My honest opinion would be considered taboo (but if you really want to know, PM me), so I'm trying to be constructive and helping you polish your work. I won't waste my time if this is not something you actually want.

Well, I for one happen to enjoy reading the critique, so if nobody else, you have at least one avid reader.

Same here. It's my favorite part of these stories.

[Viridian]

It's why I prefer making the critiques public rather than private. It's not a personal smackdown; it's a learning experience, and I find it fascinating to see how others can critically view pieces of writing. Your comment is appreciated, and in time I'd like to do commentaries on my own stories.

[The Great Red Spot]

101927700, haven't you tried MMD (Miku Miku Dance) for your Anna sinking animations.

[The Great Red Spot]

101927700, haven't you tried MMD (Miku Miku Dance) for your Anna sinking animations.

[101927700]

101927700, haven't you tried MMD (Miku Miku Dance) for your Anna sinking animations.

No. And I don't plan to. I forgot how much I hated all of my old stories...