Quicksand Phone Call

[Sparky81]

I had this idea for a short story. Let me know what you think...

For their 10th anniversary Brook asked her husband Devin if he really wanted something he never asked for. As he thought for a minute, he wondered if it was finally time to tell Brook about his quicksand interests. Before he talked himself out of the idea, he opened up about it.

At first Brook was confused and upset, but as Devin calmly explained that she was the star of all his quicksand fantasies, Brook was excited by it. The idea of being saved by Devin was very erotic. Brook began calling Devin at work around lunch time to role play sinking in quicksand for him. It was random and always a surprise. Devin would quietly sneak off to the bathroom to “enjoy” Brook’s phone call….

“Hi babe, how is your day going?”

“You have to help me! I’m REALLY in quicksand!”

“Ohhhh you are?”

“Listen to me, I’m not pretending. I’m in quicksand! Help me! You have to leave now!”

“This is great! Let me get to the bathroom.”

“Devin honey, please listen to me, I drove to the old reservoir. The spot we used to fool around as kids. I found a swampy area near the edge and tested it. It was supposed to be a huge surprise that I was REALLY sinking for you. I did it, I’m sinking, can’t feel the bottom and nothing to grab on to. Help me! Come save me!”

“This…is…so fucking hot!”

“DEVIN! I’m not playing around! Wait…wait…I’ll take a pic to prove it…did you get it?”

“No pic. I don’t need one to imagine how hot you look sinking…wow.”

“I can’t…..there’s nothing to…it’s past my chest…DEVIN!”

“Yes…yes…tell me how you’re struggling.”

“If you don’t leave RIGHT NOW I’m going to drown! DEVIN LISTEN TO ME!”

“I’m so fucking hard. Don’t stop I love this.”

“Oh God! Someone help me!......Honey I’m sinking fast…..please believe me…”

“I do…..ohhhh I do…..”

“HELP!.....No, no, no…..Devin...... (Gurgle)…….hel…. (Gurgle)……………..(sound of bubbles)

“Holy Shit Brook! I came so hard! That was the best one yet!”

(Silence)

“Brook? Hey?......Sweetheart?.......are you there? I loved how you used water to make it sound real. Baby?”

Devin’s phone dinged. When he checked it was pic from Brook. She was in the mud just as she said.

[KostiaM]

I hope she's alright.

[JSample]

Reads like a good setup for a horror film short.