My quicksand story contest entry

[water_bug_62208]

Until 15 Nov 09, rolls around, I'm going to keep putting the Halloween Quicksand Story Contest entries on top and together to ensure all contestants get a fair look.

[Lomax]

Sorry for taking so long to get round to reading this. I fully intend to read and comment on all the entries before the voting deadline.

Not a bad little story, albeit in a well-trodden sub-genre. I felt you detracted from the flow by jumping around between tenses, though.

Thank-you for taking the trouble to enter.

[Viridian]

I imagine it's more pleasure than trouble

[Anna_Sinks]

Ya it was definitely fun. No troubles here. As to the comment about tenses, I get that problem a lot. I was never very good in english. I have been told by a few people that I do that. The problem is that office word doesnt tell me its a problem. only spelling and sentence fragments and what nots. I am trying to get better. Hope my next story I write wont have that problem to much. Thanks to all for their kind words as well.

[water_bug_62208]

Grouping together the Halloween Quicksand Story Contest entries.