The pits

[Vampire]

The early summer's evening air was suddenly pierced by loud shouts followed by the sharp click of a high
heel matched only by the soft pat of a bare foot treading beside it. Click, Pat, Click, Pat. "Get away from me Joe!" yelled
Amanda as she beat a hasty retreat down the sidewalk away from Joe. "I know what you are doing to me." she murmered
as her head spun. Joe followed slowly behind Amanda, carefully stepping over her discarded highheel shoe and continuing
on into the park behing her. Amanda was feeling very strange now, her vision was blurry, and her mind was having trouble
processing simple thoughts. The sign she passed by at the entrance to the park was just a jumble of strange symbols to her.
"wh.... why am I sooooooooooo tired" she wondered aloud at a pitch just above a whisper. "I danced with hiiiiiimmmm..
and we had..... we had a few drinkssss" Suddenly she realized in her stupor he must have slipped something in her last
drink, or perhaps all of them for all she knew. "Im soooo hot, I feel like Im gonna passss out." Amanda stumbled against a
bench, sitting down she removed her other shoe letting it fall to the sidewalk. She sat for a second to catch her breath and
cool off. "Just a second" she thought. There was a large shape in front of her and it took her a few seconds to realize it was
a huge statue of a dinosaur. "ha ha," Amanda gigled "now I knooow Im seeing thingssss." Joe called out to her in the
encroaching darkness "Amandaaaaa". The hair on the back of her neck stood up straight as she remembered her plight.
"Oh god NO!" Amanda hastily lept to her feet and stumbled on down the path once again away from Joe, who was still
slowly following and tormenting Amanda. Joe passed a small directional sign that indicated the bridge over the pits was
just ahead, and he decided to make his move there. Amanda stumbed along even more off balance now, she fell against a
freestanding water fountain along the sidewalk. As she pushed off of it and back towards the sidewalk she felt a hand grasp
the back of her blue tube top. Amanda screamed as she twisted violently in her captor's grasp, unable to break it's hold she
flung the top over her head and ran away. Joe laughed an evil laugh as he saw her torn top swaying from the bottom of
the fountain. Amanda continued on not caring that she was now topless. She diddnt try to hide her perfect breasts as she
walked down the sidewalk now too tired to run. Her short skirt was torn and soiled and hanging off her hips in such a way
that if a gentle breeze were to happen upon it it would be torn from her body. Amanda could barely keep her eyes open now
as she came to a narrow bridge that went out over a murky pond beneath it. As she began up the incline her skirt slipped
away from her hips working it's way down her sexy legs and finally to the bridge. Amanda walked on slowly leaning against
the railing her perfect round ass moving side to side as she walked. Joe moved in a bit closer now, he could see that she had
neglected to wear any panties. His mind raced with the things he would do to her when he caught her. He smiled as he saw
her drop to her knees, "finally" he said aloud accidentially. Amanda's head spun around and she could see her tormentor
was within feet of her. A panic set in suddenly that she had forgotten as she grew more and more tired. Adrenalin surged to her brain
and she became very aware of herself and her surroundings. Amanda lept to her feet as fast as she could ready to take flight again,
but she lost her balance almost immediately. She turned as she began to move faster than her legs could carry her and
slammed into the low railing of the bridge. Joe stepped towards her to grab her and as his hand came to within an inch of her neck
Amanda grabbed his wrist and tried to push him away, but Joe was too strong. Instead of pushing joe back she lost her balance
once again. The small of her back acted as a fulcrum against the bridge railing and Amanda flipped backwards off the bridge and out
of Joe's reach. Amanda was too scared to scream as she tumbled end over end for 12 horrifying feet, finally landing on her back with
a loud wet "SMACK!" She could feel her body rise and fall over and over again as the pit beneath her undulated from the
impact of her 120 pound frame. Amanda laid very still. She could feel the warm soft surface below her, like she was on her
waterbed at home. "what the hell?" Amanda murmered as she tried to turn her head. Her hair was held tight by whatever she
landed on. She tried to rasie her hand to her face but as she lifted her arm she felt the surface raise too not letting her go.
Joe leaned over the railing he was laughing as he smiled down at her and said "guess what babe? Your in a tar pit"
Suddenly it all made sense the giant dinosaur, the sign she couldnt read.... "Oh no...." Amanda said quietly.
Now she could smell the thick black tar. It held her body like a giant glue paper trap. She couldnt raise her head or
turn her self in any way. Once again she was feeling sooooo tired. Joe leaned down over the railing and blew Amanda a kiss mockingly
"sleep tight" he said laughing at his own joke. Suddenly a bright flashlight beam shined on Joe's face from the other side of the bridge.
"Hey! the park is closed after dark!" yelled a firm voice. Joe quickly dissapeared into the night running the opposite
direction from the flashlight wielding man. Amanda cried out in a weak scared voice "helllp me please..."
The flashlight beam danced about on the bridge and across the railing, Amanda cried out once again "down here..." The beam found her
creamy white skinned naked body laying on a thick black bed of sticky death. "Oh my God lady!" the cop yelled down to her
"I'm gonna get help" The officer radioed in to the station and within minutes rescue was on the way. Amanda laid there helpless,
she felt the pit undulating beneath her again, only this time not from her own movements. "Im gonna die" she thought.

Within 15 minutes a small crowd had gathered around the pit, and the rescuers were assembled on the bridge above her rigging a basket,
and fireman to come to her rescue. "Are you cold ma'am?" Yelled one of the firemen. Amanda thought about it and shouted back
"no.... Im very warm actually" She felt the undulation again only stronger this time. "Please hurry!" Amanda shouted as the pit shook.
She felt a large bubble form under her foot as she laid on the surface. the entire back of her left leg was stuck fast to the surface of the pit
but her right leg was bent at the knee with only the bottom of her right foot in contact with the pit. The left side of her back was stuck to
the surface as well. her left arm was also held fast to the surface, as was her right arm from the elbow down to her hand. The bubble
grew larger and larger under her tiny foot. And Amanda couldnt help but push it down with her foot only to feel it rise back up again.
One of the firemen saw what she was doing, and said to her "Dont do that". Amanda looked up at him and said "why not?"
As if to answer her question the large black bubble popped with a large "BLOOP!" sound. Her cute, soft, foot plunged deep
into the void the bubble left in the surface of the Tar pit. She could feel the soft, warm, slimy, sticky, Tar sliding up to her knee.
The remnants of the bubble Splattered her left leg and splashed up onto her stomach. "ewww" Amanda gasped as she tried to pull her foot back out.
The tar held her like a spider's web. Panic set in as she thrashed about trying to break free. The tar was slimy and it oozed
very easily against itself but it held her fast. She began to cry as she felt the horrible ooze creaping up over her right knee and she felt her entire
back ease itself down onto the sticky surface as the heavy Tar pulled her leg down. "DONT MOVE" Pleaded her rescuers, But it was to no avail.
Amanda pulled hard to free her arm and as it came free it tore the surface layer open underneath it. Amanda's hips began to
rise high off the surface of the Tar as a huge bubble formed under her perfect ass. Her gaze met the eye of the
Cop who had called for help, only to see him look away as the giant bubble popped underneath her. Tar splattered over her face
and into her mouth, across her beautiful tits, as the bubble popped. Amanda felt her legs slide deeper into the Tar, and her
hips slowly were pulled into the creamy black morass. She felt the warmth of the tar on her skin, and actually
decided that if this was how she was going to go, she was going to enjoy it. With her free hand Amanda slid it down her body, across
her large round breasts, and down her tight tummy smearing thick black oozing tar as her hand moved down. Finally she felt her fingers
reach their destination between her legs just as she sank to her waist in the ooze. Amanda began rubbing herself hard knowing she diddnt have long,
her would be rescuers pleaded with her to hold still, but she was already deaf to them. The tar held her from the waist down, pushing her hand
against her clit as she sank. She was going..... Still laying on her back on a large piece of the thick film that had supported her this whole time Amanda
shook with pleasure tima and time again. Everytime she shook she slid deeper into oblivion. Finally as her perfect tits came to rest on the surface of
the gooey tar, Amanda came her final time, moaning in pure pleasure she let the tar suck her beautiful soft tits under. "Here I go"
Amanda said calmly as the tar crept up her neck, up to her chin, and finally framing her face in black, before gushing into her open mouth over her full
red lips. "MMmmmmmmppphhhhh!" was the sound that escaped just before her sexy eyes closed as the tar swept over her face. She was gone..
After a few seconds a large bubble burst on the surface of the tar pit and Amanda was flung out and back onto the surface of the thick film of tar.
The Firemen scrambled to throw a rope to her to hopefully save her this time, but they were not prepared for what happened next. Amanda began
clawing at the surface of the tar to break the film once again. As she opened a large hole in the surface exposing the thick black mucky tar she leaned foreward
and slid back in head first. letting herself slip slowly back under. The shocked crowd watched as her shapely ass and legs were devoured slowly by the churning
Tar. Until her tiny tar coated feet slid under the surface, and the film was able to come back together.

[AyaneMatrix]

Now that was an interesting read and it's based on one of my favorite means of sinking - tar! The setup leading poor Amanda into the tar pit was pretty decent, with her loosing her shoes and then her clothing the closer she got to the pit, and the her being in the sticky mire felt pretty much natural. Well, obviously to the interesting parts. I also find it interesting that she somehow was flung from the tar pit as it's gasses erupted to the surface, only to force herself back under. Too bad it didn't leave much of a chance for rescue. But, meh, not much use complaining about that; it's tar for crying out loud!

Now, what could use some work would actually be the punctuation, spacing, and better paragraph definition to give the way the story is read a better tempo and to keep it to be several long streams of sentences. I'm not sure how it was originally written, but it almost seems like it was typed in a text editor of sorts and pasted here, into the forums, where it somehow lost it's formatting. With a little clean up, as stated prior, it'll be fixed and easier to read for future viewers.

Great work though and keep those girls sinking into that sticky tar!

[quagmire_uk]

That was pretty damn cool! The set-up was indeed great, as was how at first she was merely stuck and not sinking. The fact that there were would-be rescuers almost immediately rather than it being a lonely sink was another aspect that made it different from lots of other stories.

The fact that she then intentionally dived under seemed a bit crazy though, lol. I can believe in her "surrendering" to the tar, but to be annoyed when released and determined to sink under seems a little less likely.

[zhukov 93]

Nice story!!!!