First time writer - Secure the intelligence(WWII Fiction, Fatal, Willing)

[DeuteriumTritium]

"C'mon, let's get outta here." said Lindy to herself, as she watched the Nazi soldiers disappear into the distance.

Lindy is a 19 year old, blonde girl with amazing brain which can memorize almost anything. She serves the Free France as a messenger, after when the Allied HQ discovered that Germany had broken their code.

2 weeks ago, she had been told to remember an important intelligence and send it to the British. 3 days ago, she arrived at the British and told them about the secrecy, grabbed some weapons, more rations and water, and began her way back.

Mission accomplished. she thought, as she crossed the English Channel under the distraction of an Allied air raid, and start making her way back to the French HQ. However, it is not going to be as simple...

Not a week after, when she was walking in the forest, she heard the sound of gasoline engine, and it is being amplified very quickly. She immediately leapt behind a bush, and watched as her previous spot has been destroyed by 100 rounds. "I'm doomed. It wouldn't even take an hour for the German army to come." she thought. As the German aircraft flew away to report its findings, she reached for her bag and took out a sheet of paper which translates to:
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When discovered by German forces(if possibles)

1. Try to set some traps
2. Hide if they do not have dogs
3. Climb up a tree
4. Take as many out as possible
5. Get rid of your bag
6. Commit suicide(preferably with quicksand)

By Lindy
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"Hmmm, traps." she whispered, wrapping her coat on a rock, put it on the ground, and carefully she slid a fused grenade underneath, completing her first trap, before taking off another piece for a different trap.

Not long before the fully naked Lindy heard the sound of many footsteps. She hid her bag, climbed up a tree, and got her pistol locked and loaded. The footsteps are getting closer. About 5 minutes after, a group of 50 German soldiers came to capture her. They immediately noticed the coat on the ground. A few poor guys went to check it out.

BOOM!

The grenade exploded almost instantaneously as the stone is removed. Lindy smiled slightly. 4 down, she thought. The Germans became much more alert after the loss of 4 people, all started guard around. Lindy looked down at them amusingly. She dropped down a grenade between these people. Another 6, she thought as she quickly leapt onto another tree, firing several shots at the Germans below. 13 so far.

5 minutes later, as Lindy ran out of traps, grenades and bullets, and when she discovered that she is encircled in the forest, she finally decided to end her final entertainment. On a tree above a bubbling bog not far from her traps, Lindy stood high above all the rest, her skin glowed under the sun. A wave of wind blows at the forest, which looked like the trees are waving her farewell. She smiled widely, "Doesn't matter if they will hear anything...nothing matters now, except for the fact that they will never get the intelligence they craved!" She jumped, sealing her end in a beautiful smile, without a care in this world.

She sank to her knees just from the fall, and she struggled and danced to sink deeper. She moaned gently as the mud moves around her sensitive areas. However, instead of starting orgasms, she decided to do it at the last moment, as she is much more interested in leaving the world a mystery. Doing orgasm right now will get her discovered. Her HQ do not know her plan for the worst, the one in her bag is destroyed into a million pieces as the bag fell from a tree and exploded as a trap. No one shall ever find out about her outcome.

All the years she had been crying for everything. For the death of her parents, her relatives, her friends, her comrades. All the stress has been built up to this very moment, which manifested itself as a broad grin of relief. It is the relief of her short 19 year life, the relief of her finally being one with the world, the relief of contributing so much to the end of the war, the relief of completing the mission. She started to laugh loudly, move violently, as long as it would not get her discovered. Finally, she cannot hold it anymore, as she shoved her mouth in, she started the first orgasm ever in her life. She opened her mouth and let the quicksand take over, which caused her to sink faster. But still, she had a big smile on her face, and it held even after when she completely sank beneath the surface. Her smile will be preserved in the bog as a skull, marking her joy of relief and orgasm for eternity.

Back at the French HQ, at the dawn of 25tf day Lindy left, the leader found a note as he flipped the calendar, which translates to:
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Sir. If I still did not come back when you saw this note, do not worry about me, Everything is going according to my plan. My life was always going as I planned it beautifully, and my end should be no exceptions. Everything is going to be fine. The intelligence will not be taken by the Germans.

Best regard
Lindy


*Fin*

[PM2K]

Not bad. Thanks for posting this.

[AnonymousQuote]

Fun little read
As you continue to write stories, focus on elongating your ideas. There's a lot of good content here that could be enhanced by more worldbuilding and descriptions. Veteran writer Viridian has written a great text for people just starting out -- I can't seem to find it right now, I'll try to add it later when I have a bit more time.
Keep at it!

[DeuteriumTritium]

Fun little read
As you continue to write stories, focus on elongating your ideas. There's a lot of good content here that could be enhanced by more worldbuilding and descriptions. Veteran writer Viridian has written a great text for people just starting out -- I can't seem to find it right now, I'll try to add it later when I have a bit more time.
Keep at it!

Not bad. Thanks for posting this.

Thanks! I will try to post, hopefully, better stuff(I have always been failing writings)

[AnonymousQuote]

Fun little read
As you continue to write stories, focus on elongating your ideas. There's a lot of good content here that could be enhanced by more worldbuilding and descriptions. Veteran writer Viridian has written a great text for people just starting out -- I can't seem to find it right now, I'll try to add it later when I have a bit more time.
Keep at it!

Not bad. Thanks for posting this.

Thanks! I will try to post, hopefully, better stuff(I have always been failing writings)

I managed to find that post I mentioned, it used to be stickied on the top, but has since been buried.
viewtopic.php?f=14&t=10067&hilit=Writing+quicksand+stories
It's a long read, but very worth it if you want to improve your writing

[Viridian]

Interesting. I wrote a similar WW2 story years back:
viewtopic.php?f=14&t=30

My advice is to take the time to build a good story. Don't feel like you have to rush. Make a believable character, take the time to describe things in detail and help us get into the character's head. It's easy to throw random things together, but in the end create a shallow, forgettable story.