Sir Muttley stories: The lost World (long story)

[Lomax]

Congratulations on having the nerve to post your first story. Horrible feeling, isn't it?

I have to confess that when I see the name "Muttley" a certain image forms in my mind.....

Not a bad little story (not a long one, despite what you say - but then, I have form in this regard), and none the worse for treading familiar territory.

Since you ask, one writing tip I would make would be to use more full stops, rather than write in mega-sentences. Each of the first three paragraphs of the story proper, for example, consists of a single sentence of fifty words or more. The story would flow better if they were broken up.

[quagmire_uk]

Wow, that was great! Just read the sequel too. Enjoyed them both.

[PM2K]

Excellent tale indeed! Thanks for sharing it with the rest of us!

[Aiko]

Despite what you said, it did not seem like a long story at all. I think you did very well with this one.

I especially liked how you described the damp jungle and the muddy ground and all those forboding signs. That made me expect Jane to stumble into quicksand at any turn.