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Lazing on a Sunny Afternoon

Posted: Tue Apr 28, 2009 6:46 pm
by Lomax
This one has undergone a bit of a re-write. First time round I got a bit carried away and dragged out the ending into inconsistent territory. I've now cut it back.

Re: Lazing on a Sunny Afternoon

Posted: Wed Apr 29, 2009 9:46 am
by quagmire_uk
Very nice! :)

Of course, I imediately become curious and want to read the old version where the ending went into inconsistent territory, heh.

Re: Lazing on a Sunny Afternoon

Posted: Thu Apr 30, 2009 8:25 pm
by Lomax
quagmire_uk wrote:Of course, I imediately become curious and want to read the old version where the ending went into inconsistent territory, heh.


As far as I know, it's still available on Deep Sinking if you do a bit of searching.

Re: Lazing on a Sunny Afternoon

Posted: Tue May 05, 2009 8:14 am
by Viridian
I have a copy of the original version. I definitely agree that this is more refined. Thanks for the post :)

Re: Lazing on a Sunny Afternoon

Posted: Tue May 05, 2009 7:18 pm
by Lomax
Viridian wrote:Thanks for the post.


After my appalling behaviour last year towards you and others, I'm just grateful that you're still speaking to me.