No. 8 Part 2

[Solrex]

Thank you so much for reposting the last part, as well as posting a new part. This story had me on the edge of my- well, actually, I was just edging. It seems to me, at least in my experience, that someone's first quicksand story has a bit of a shine to it; my first story was amazing, but the next few were rough until I got more practice. This story was well written.

Just a few things to note: when someone is thinking dialogue, usually thoughts are put into single quotes. Not sure if that's industry standard, something I was taught, or personal preference though. Also, in the end of the last part, it said they had much more to do on day 2. I was wondering what they were going to do, but eh, fair enough, it's not necessary.

However, let me tell you something right now: you have potential. Sure, there might be typos here or there, but when you really try, you make amazing work. I hope you enjoy yourself in this community, and make the most of what you have.

[CurlyJ]

Thank you for posting a follow up to what I thought was a GREAT Part 1. Really enjoying this story. Looking forward to seeing where the next part takes us. (Also, like the last poster said, I'm so glad you reposted your original story!)