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Katie's Sensual Demise

Posted: Mon Jun 17, 2019 12:38 am
by abcdefg123
Been a lurker here for quite some time so I figured I'd contribute to society. :lol:
This is my first story and I'm no expert at grammar or writing so feel free to leave constructive criticism. Thank you.

Katie's Sensual Demise

By abcdefg123


Mud... Ever since she discovered that ankle-deep puddle of mud as a child, it had always stuck in her mind. Katie Anderson, 25, had been obsessed with everything having to do with mud. The amount of research and exploration that had been put into her secret hobby could fill well over five triple-subject notebooks. Everything from making mud pies, to getting her clothes soaked in dirty mud which made her parents not too happy with her, she had done it all.

Except for sinking.

Beep! Beep! Beep!.... Katie's alarm clock had woken her up with a start. She read the glowing red numbers of 13:05, and was about to freak out before remembering that today was Saturday. Katie planted her face back into the pillow and exhaled a huge sigh of relief. Work had killed her yesterday, and she had no energy for a repeat. Rolling over onto her back, Katie stared at the ceiling of her small cottage. She loved living in the countryside despite the semi-long commute to work. The main
reason for living out here was for nature, and of course, the occasional mud pit.

Katie was a fiery redhead who stood at 5' 2" with a generous bust and a very round apple butt, both inherited from her mother, Katie turned heads from guys and girls alike whenever she walked past. No man had ever been with Katie though, she had kept to herself all her life and it made her sexiness seem to stand out harder than it already did.

Katie's boss and most of her male coworkers were very sweet and kind to her. Of course, she knew that came with an expectation. The problem came whenever she turned down a coworker, and they just kept coming back. Katie appreciated the attention, but it was honestly getting annoying now. Besides, her true affection only rested with the mud pits around her house.

"Fuck me" Katie whispered to herself.

The joints in her feet were on fire due to the copious amounts of standing that she had done at work yesterday. Katie unwillingly got up from her inviting bed and took a small trip to her medicine cabinet in her bathroom. She looked at her reflection as she popped two advils into her mouth. Katie was downright gorgeous, and she knew it. Hell, looking at herself in just a barely fitting nightgown could wake up her... inner senses.

Katie bit her lip and knew exactly how to spend her lovely weekend off, exploring the nature around her cottage... that mud belonging to nature as well of course.

Katie slipped on some sandals and made her way out of her cottage, wearing just the nightgown. Another beauty of living out in the countryside was that her neighbors lived miles apart, meaning she could go commando and no one would notice. Katie particularly liked this fact since the warm, Summer breeze could kiss her skin with little resistance.

"Mmm," Katie softly moaned as the breeze caressed her under her nightgown. "Let's see what we can find today." She thought.

Katie took off with a lazy stride as she walked between the humongous redwoods that surrounded her private paradise. Nature seemed to stretch on forever, and she was in no hurry to explore it all.

The ground under her sandals started to feel a little soft, and that gave Katie the indication that she was nearing a natural bog or clay pit around.

Katie smiled to herself. "It's been way too long since I've gotten out here and ruined a perfect piece of clothing." She thought.

Katie continued walking along the soft ground until she came across a clearing in the redwoods. Walking closer, she discovered the culprit of the soft ground. It was clay alright, but this particular pit had a different, mysterious look to it.

The clay pit stretched about 20 feet, and it was golden brown, almost the color of brown sugar.

"Out of all the numerous pits that I've seen, I've never come across such a beauty as this one." Thought Katie.

The clay looked warm and inviting, almost as if it were calling out to her, begging her to take a dip. Katie's consistent gaze at the pit contained nothing but curiosity and lust.

Katie took a few steps forward and sat on the ground right in front of seducing clay. Kicking off her sandals and stretching her legs out before her, she timidly placed her feet in the impatiently waiting loam.

"Holy shit!" She moaned aloud.

Once Katie had placed her feet into the clay, it immediately began to tickle and suck them down. It was as if the pit was a giant mouth with many tongues; caressing and fondling every inch of her feet.

Katie watched the clay slowly swallow her feet and begin to make its leisurely way up her ankles, molesting every inch of skin on its way up, not that Katie minded of course. The clay was working miracles on her spent joints, and Katie was loving every second of it. The clay was also working wonders on her womanhood as well...

Katie had been ignoring the tingling feelings that started as soon as she saw the mud to enjoy the clay 100%, but she couldn't ignore those bubbling feelings that were making her so hot anymore. She swiftly tugged off her nightgown and threw it somewhere behind her. It was the last thing on Katie's mind right now.

With the Summer breeze having no barriers to Katie's body, it wasted no time in gently caressing her nude form, kissing her particularly sensitive breasts, intensifying the feeling of the clay on her ankles. It drove Katie wild. She brought her right hand down to feel her leaking cunt.

"Ohhhhhhhhhh, lord!" She moaned out loud. Katie didn't expect her touch to be so electric. The heavenly clay was working its way up her mid-calves and was amplifying her senses. She couldn't help but rub that sensitive spot that she had grown familiar with over the years.

"Uh oh god." Her moans were getting louder. "Why didn't I find this place sooner?" She whimpered as her circular motions on her womanhood brought her closer to the edge.

The clay was had climbed to the bottom of Katie's knees when her explosion hit her like a truck.

"Oh fuck me! Oh god!" She cried out while arching her back. Waves of pleasure mixed with the sucking clay passed through her as she felt her womanhood spray on her hand and beyond. Katie was practically seeing stars as she slowly came out of her little slice of heaven. She looked at the clay lazily resting at the bottom of her knees. Her fluids had reached the surface of the clay, which made it's gold tones seem to glisten. It couldn't climb up anymore since she was sitting on solid
ground, and it seemed almost disappointed that it couldn't take more of Katie for itself...

Katie looked at the golden surface of the clay where her legs where slightly buried. It looked so warm and inviting. She tried to move her legs through the clay and found that it was surprisingly thick, and it still felt as if it were trying to suck her down, still massaging and licking at her legs.

Katie felt like she was practically dreaming when she finally realized two facts. One, she had yet to find a mud or clay pit that been deeper than her ankles. Two, her feet couldn't feel a bottom yet. Both of these facts made her heart race.

"Sink." Katie thought. "I could sink in this pit since its depth is unknown to me." She had never thought about sinking before since all the pits she had explored were far from deep.

"Let's get out of here and go home to research this a little bit," Katie said to herself.

Katie slowly tried to lift her legs out but they wouldn't budge. The suction on them was unbelievable and was enticing her to go forward instead of back. She was tempted to, but the voice of reason in her head told her to be patient and research it before going any further. Katie listened to it and started scooting backward to the clay's dismay.

Katie's legs were slowly reappearing inch by inch. It was extremely hard work though. The golden brown clay was stupidly thick and way too stubborn to give up without a fight. Her ankles reappeared and that gave Katie enough leverage to jerk her feet out. They released with a gurgling *plop!

Katie stood up slowly with her trembling legs. The thick clay slowly rolled down them and puddled by her feet. She looked down at the holes where her legs had been and watched the thick clay lazily fill them up. The surface looked just as before her feet entered it, undisturbed and inviting. That alone made her shudder with excitement.

Katie slipped her sandals back on her dirty feet and proceeded to walk back home, forgetting all about her nightgown near the clay.

After showering and putting on a stained oversized tee shirt with some pink booty shorts that probably weren't appropriate in public, Katie sat down at her computer and proceeded to look up articles on deep mud. In her search, Katie found several forums where people had posted videos and topics about themselves sinking in various bogs and clay pits. They didn't say it was dangerous at all due to the human body's buoyancy when getting about chest deep, but they recommended to bring a sturdy rope as getting out could be quite the challenge.

Seeing this information on the screen made Katie's heart race again. She could feel her nipples pressing against her shirt. Just the thought of trying something brand new and in that heavenly clay made her feel all tingly again. Katie took a look at her clock that read 14:30.

"Plenty of daylight!" She concluded. She rushed out of her front door and skipped to her shed. "Excitement", could only lightly describe what she was feeling right now. Katie practically kicked her shed door open and made a tornado out of her shed before she finally found the medium bungee cord. Looking at the cord, Katie remembered all the fun times that she had had with it as a teen.

"I was quite the daredevil with those bridges." Katie laughed to herself. Wrapping the cord around her shoulder, Katie walked out of her shed and took a deep breath, mentally preparing herself for the new experiences and emotions that she was about to feel. The Summer breeze flowed through her, motivated her, seduced her. Katie took one last look at her cottage before turning around to head into the redwoods. She was ready to get dirty.

5 minutes later, Katie approached the clearing again and was greeted by the golden brown clay. It almost seemed to call out to her...their encounter fresh in both of their minds. She found a tree close by and looped the cord around once. Attaching the metal hook onto the looped cord, Katie failed to notice just how loosely attached the hook was to the cord. She turned her attention back on the pit. Near the edge, there was a small, rocky ledge that extended outward into the pit, mimicking a small diving board. Katie took a tentative step onto the ledge and stepped towards edge after finding that it was sturdy enough.

Katie's curiosity was driving her wild, so she took off her shorts and shirt off in a hurry and decided to do a little experiment before stepping in the clay. She balled up her clothes in a tight bundle and timidly dropped them in the clay. The earth immediately responded, seeping through the holes and loops until the pink shorts and stained shirt submerged with a gurgling *plop!

"Guess I won't be seeing those again." She muttered.

Standing at the very edge of her little ledge, Katie had put the end of her cord over the ledge, just above the clay where she wouldn't have a problem reaching it. All she had to do now was take that final step into the golden brown substance that would surely suck her down. Katie's heart was hammering like a woodpecker, her nerves were on ultra high alert. Suddenly, the Summer breeze came back, blowing at her back, whispering in her ear to not be afraid.

That was all the encouragement that Katie needed. With her nerves dampened, she took a very small, fateful hop into the waiting golden brown clay...

Katie immediately sank to her mid-calves which immediately triggered a moan from her. The tickling and sucking clay was wasting no time in making her feel good and dragging her down to itself. Katie felt her feet being pushed down by the clay against her own will, and couldn't help but giggle as the clay seemed to have a mind of its own.

Prodding around with her toes, Katie couldn’t feel a bottom. This made her smile more as it meant that she could sink deeper.

Katie was sinking at a very leisurely pace because the clay was so thick. It was taking minutes for the clay to claim each inch of new territory. Not that Katie or the clay exactly minded. She was receiving the best massage of her life, and the clay had been starved of attention for years. It was a win-win situation...for now.

As the clay crept its way to the bottom of her knees, Katie had made another pleasant discovery. The clay here was considerably warmer than the edge where she’d been earlier, and this warmth was sending Katie into Candy Land.

“Mmmm.” Katie moaned softly. It was as if she were at a mud spa, but the mud was clay, and the clay was super exotic, and only had the intention of sucking her down.

As Katie came out of her little daydream, she looked down in time to see the clay finish off her knees and began its conquest on her lower thighs. With the clay slowly inching its way up her thighs, Katie couldn't ignore what her body demanded of her anymore. The clay on her skin just drove Katie wild.

Closing her eyes, Katie slid her right hand down her waist to her awaiting clit.

"Oh, Jesus." Katie whimpered. The clay, which had sucked her down to her mid thighs, was already turning her on enough and her touch lit a fuse to a gigantic climax. Katie didn't need any more encouragement. She quickly placed two fingers onto her little sensitive nub, and began a steady, circular motion; her pace rising as the clay slowly sucked her down.

"Ughhhh yes!" Katie moaned. The clay was inching its way up her body, almost to her upper thighs. This was only driving Katie wilder as her fuse was about to burn out. Her fingers going wild on her clit, bringing her closer to what she's been craving since hopping into the thick earth. The golden brown clay had finally reached her upper thighs when her fuse burned out.

"OHHHH UGHHH!" Katie screamed out into the air while arching her back. Her climax ripped through her body and sent Katie into her heaven. It was a million times better than when she was at the edge of the clay.

When the stars had finally cleared from Katie’s vision, she had lazily looked down to find that the clay’s golden brown surface was much closer to her than before. She also noticed that the clay had almost sucked in her upper thighs and was getting dangerously close to her quivering clit.

Katie’s thoughts drifted to how the clay would feel in her clit, how it would feel to have it a massage and lick her from the inside out. She let her left hand lightly tread the surface of the clay. Katie couldn’t help but giggle as she felt the clay run through her fingers.

“Hehe god, it’s trying to take my hand away as well.” Katie could feel the light pulling on her fingers as they grazed the surface of the clay.

That's when she felt it.

"Mmmmm." Katie moaned. The clay had finally succeeded in pulling her down to her clit and was slowly flooding its way inside her. Katie could hardly believe the spectacle she was seeing; the colorful clay slowly flowing in her, molesting every centimeter of space inside her. All of her erotic feelings were not going away anytime soon.

The clay had risen to cover half of her clit and she could still feel no bottom at the ends of her toes. Behind her, the clay had started its conquest on her voluptuous ass, slowly rising her cheeks and forcing its way in her crack.

Katie watched in bliss as her clit disappeared beneath the enticing gold surface of the clay. She bit her lip and sighed to herself as she felt the clay pushing inside her clit and ass. It was merciless with her, especially since the tongue-like feeling of the clay was now inside her and didn't seem like it was ever going to stop.

"Uggghhh!" Katie moaned again while throwing her head back. The clay had just given her another mind-blowing orgasm.

"I didn't even have to move or anything." She thought out loud. While Katie was lost in her thought and enjoying the erotic clay, the clay itself had taken the opportunity to slowly pull her down to just under her belly button, slowly anticipating her rib cage.

The fumes that the clay was giving off had finally succeeded in making Katie hallucinate, giving it time to pull her down further without making her too aware...

The clay had taken half of Katie's rib cage, but she was too intoxicated with orgasms and drug-like clay fumes to even notice. Every touch and movement, hell, even her thoughts stimulated her sex drive. The clay had a vice-like grip on her body and her emotions, and she was in complete submission to the clay.

The clay had successfully taken Katie's rib cage and had finally started on her luscious chest.

Katie felt the bottoms of her bust touching the surface of the clay; still heavily dazed, she looked down and saw her breasts slowly disappearing into the golden brown ooze, This only made her giggle and full of amusement as she saw her erect nipples quiver at the surface and slowly be erased by the clay. She was not prepared for how sensitive that would make her feel though.

From an outsider's view, it looked like Katie was having a mild seizure. She was having one of the best orgasms of her life. The feeling of the clay swirling around her nipples was one of no other and had pushed her off her edge faster than she could ever do herself. Katie had been managing to keep her arms above the surface since she had made her little jump about an hour ago, but her muscles were finally getting tired of being held up so long and she couldn't help but drop one arm onto the surface. The golden-brown clay instantly began pulling her arm down into its depths.

Katie watched with interest as her arm slowly disappeared into the clay and was struggling to keep her other arm in the air.

"Okay, as lovely as all of this feels, I think it's time I get out before I can't," Katie said.

She remembered the bungee cord and saw it buried half a foot from her. She grabbed it with ease and gave it a light tug, making slow progress before she heard a creaking sound.

"CRACK!!"

The loosely-attached bungee cord snapped on the tree that was holding it. The little progress that Katie had made was wiped out as the clay had sucked in the top of her breasts and was slowly munching on her shoulders.

"Oh, shit" Katie softly whispered.

Katie could not hold her other arm up any longer and unwillingly let it fall on the surface of the clay. It munched leisurely at her arm before it finally disappeared. Katie felt her arms level at her hips underneath the surface, she looked around at the environment and knew that no one was around for miles to hear her if she cried for the help. She knew that she was hopelessly stuck and sinking at the pace of a snail, but still sinking.

"There's no way out of here for me, might as well go out with a smile." Katie thought.

The mud was halfway up her shoulders when she moved her right hand through the clay to her clit, what Katie did not know was that her clit had been longing for her touch mixed with the clay since she took her jump.

"JESUS CHRIST!!!" Katie yelled out loud.

Her touch had made her clit go ballistic, and it was punishing her for ignoring it for so long. Katie was already halfway to an explosive orgasm when she felt the clay finishing off her shoulders and sucking at the bottom of her neck.

"Not a lot of time left." Katie thought.

She was moving her fingers in circles on her clit, slowly backing off and assaulting it, building it up for the right time. She could feel the clay climbing higher on her neck, the fumes assaulting her brain directly from her being so close to the surface.

"Ugh...ugh....ugh..."

Katie could barely speak coherently, the pleasure overriding all her thinking and reason. The clay had reached the bottom of her chin and she had to bend her head back into the clay to prevent it from covering her lips for a minute.
Katie was minutes away from her final climax, she skillfully kept the explosion at bay and she felt the clay climb up her head and fill her ears.

Katie looked wildly around with her eyes as she realized that she could not hear anymore. She was seconds from orgasm as she felt the clay climbing up her cheeks and was stopped just below her plump lips. Her fiery red hair had fanned across the surface, floating lazily.

Katie finally let herself loose.

With one final stroke to her clit, her climax exploded, way more powerful than her last one. Katie's eyes went wide as her orgasm ripped through her body. She could not resist the urge to scream one last time.

"UGHHHHHHHH"-glug glug...

Katie's scream was cut short as the thick clay slowly but forcefully invaded her mouth and down her throat. Her eyes bulged as the rest of her face and forehead melted into the golden brown surface of the clay. The surface exploded with a dirty, frothy mixture of her last breath and clay.

Katie's fiery hair slowly followed her lifeless body under the golden-brown surface, it was finally...extinguished.

Re: Katie's Sensual Demise

Posted: Mon Jun 17, 2019 8:47 pm
by DJlurker
Not bad for your first effort. 8-)

Re: Katie's Sensual Demise

Posted: Mon Jun 17, 2019 11:05 pm
by JSample
Seems that Katie's first... and only... time in deep mud was intoxicatingly satisfying for her, and while there were a few minor grammatical issues, as you mentioned, abcd, they didn't take away from my enjoying your story. Thanks for taking the story-telling plunge and sharing your creativity! :)

Re: Katie's Sensual Demise

Posted: Tue Jun 18, 2019 5:43 pm
by ghostofmyeyes
I like your style. Encore!

Re: Katie's Sensual Demise

Posted: Wed Jun 19, 2019 5:15 pm
by Solrex
This was a really good story, I believe that after the initial knee sink, and I had had my fun with that part, as I read the next part, I was leaking without touch, aside from the touch that happened earlier. That's gotta be a first, if not first, then relatively new experience to me. This story was really well written.

However, I have to argue about one thing. You had the character Google how to escape quicksand, and she read that you have buoyancy, and can't sink to about below the chest. However, later, the bungee cord snaps off. Instead of being trapped there, she then submerges, despite her buoyancy and the buoyancy physics you introduced into the story.

Don't get me wrong, a story can still be good if it ignores buoyancy, but you can't choose to have buoyancy in one moment, and then in the same story, eliminate it altogether.

How would I fix it? Would I want to write about being trapped in quicksand for hours on end, until I die from the elements? No, not really. Maybe I would write that she found on the internet that quicksand is capable of sucking you under, but a rope can keep you safe. Maybe, I would have her be trapped, but someone finds her and tosses her the bungee cord, and then she has to explain why she's naked. Maybe, she's so turned on that she struggles against buoyancy and drags herself under. Now, mind you, you could have done that, but it felt more like you broke the physics you prewrote in your story, rather than had her fight against a force you introduced into the story.

For what I assume is your first story, you did a really good job, and I hope to read more from you in the future. 9/10.

Re: Katie's Sensual Demise

Posted: Thu Jun 20, 2019 9:21 pm
by abcdefg123
Solrex wrote:This was a really good story, I believe that after the initial knee sink, and I had had my fun with that part, as I read the next part, I was leaking without touch, aside from the touch that happened earlier. That's gotta be a first, if not first, then relatively new experience to me. This story was really well written.

However, I have to argue about one thing. You had the character Google how to escape quicksand, and she read that you have buoyancy, and can't sink to about below the chest. However, later, the bungee cord snaps off. Instead of being trapped there, she then submerges, despite her buoyancy and the buoyancy physics you introduced into the story.

Don't get me wrong, a story can still be good if it ignores buoyancy, but you can't choose to have buoyancy in one moment, and then in the same story, eliminate it altogether.

How would I fix it? Would I want to write about being trapped in quicksand for hours on end, until I die from the elements? No, not really. Maybe I would write that she found on the internet that quicksand is capable of sucking you under, but a rope can keep you safe. Maybe, I would have her be trapped, but someone finds her and tosses her the bungee cord, and then she has to explain why she's naked. Maybe, she's so turned on that she struggles against buoyancy and drags herself under. Now, mind you, you could have done that, but it felt more like you broke the physics you prewrote in your story, rather than had her fight against a force you introduced into the story.

For what I assume is your first story, you did a really good job, and I hope to read more from you in the future. 9/10.


Dude, this. I literally noticed my mistake hours after I posted it and honestly, I was way too busy with college work/not enough time to even spend time editing it XD. I started this story in September of last year and finally got around to finishing it. Glad you enjoyed and I certainly will continue to write ;)

Re: Katie's Sensual Demise

Posted: Sat Jun 22, 2019 9:15 pm
by Solrex
abcdefg123 wrote:
Solrex wrote:This was a really good story, I believe that after the initial knee sink, and I had had my fun with that part, as I read the next part, I was leaking without touch, aside from the touch that happened earlier. That's gotta be a first, if not first, then relatively new experience to me. This story was really well written.

However, I have to argue about one thing. You had the character Google how to escape quicksand, and she read that you have buoyancy, and can't sink to about below the chest. However, later, the bungee cord snaps off. Instead of being trapped there, she then submerges, despite her buoyancy and the buoyancy physics you introduced into the story.

Don't get me wrong, a story can still be good if it ignores buoyancy, but you can't choose to have buoyancy in one moment, and then in the same story, eliminate it altogether.

How would I fix it? Would I want to write about being trapped in quicksand for hours on end, until I die from the elements? No, not really. Maybe I would write that she found on the internet that quicksand is capable of sucking you under, but a rope can keep you safe. Maybe, I would have her be trapped, but someone finds her and tosses her the bungee cord, and then she has to explain why she's naked. Maybe, she's so turned on that she struggles against buoyancy and drags herself under. Now, mind you, you could have done that, but it felt more like you broke the physics you prewrote in your story, rather than had her fight against a force you introduced into the story.

For what I assume is your first story, you did a really good job, and I hope to read more from you in the future. 9/10.


Dude, this. I literally noticed my mistake hours after I posted it and honestly, I was way too busy with college work/not enough time to even spend time editing it XD. I started this story in September of last year and finally got around to finishing it. Glad you enjoyed and I certainly will continue to write ;)

That has got to be the best response I have ever heard to constructive criticism I've heard in a while. Thanks for taking it so well!