Testing Quicksand Rhymes (fixed en)

[Mixman]

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en (fixed):
The gentle, unsteady smooth surface waves.
Gurgles, champs, attracts, calls.
The one who will step in her in a moment plunges.
And won't find a way back any more.

ru:
Нежная, зыбкая гладь колыхается.
Булькает, чавкает, манит, зовёт.
Тот, кто ступит в нее, вмиг погружается.
И обратной дороги уже не найдет.

P.S. - Stay tuned for further updates!

[Mixman]

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Up down, up down
Mud flows down your chest
And something burns inside
Makes you fight

But the bog is inexorable
It sucks you unhurriedly
And you pulsate in orgasm playful
Deeply plunging and releasing

But the quagmire is a greedy soul
She will not let you go so easily
Playing and sucking
Do not let go and swallow

[Solrex]

This is really beautiful and poetic! I hope my writing can be as good as yours with how amazing it is.

[Mixman]

This is really beautiful and poetic! I hope my writing can be as good as yours with how amazing it is.

Thanks for feedback!
I'm not a professional - it's a some sort of a hobby...

If you like it, I'll try to write more often.

P.S. As I wrote above, English is not my native language, so translation incidents are possible, which I try to overcome with my mediocre knowledge of the language, and with the help of translation programs.

[Solrex]

This is really beautiful and poetic! I hope my writing can be as good as yours with how amazing it is.

Thanks for feedback!
I'm not a professional - it's a some sort of a hobby...

If you like it, I'll try to write more often.

P.S. As I wrote above, English is not my native language, so translation incidents are possible, which I try to overcome with my mediocre knowledge of the language, and with the help of translation programs.

Any grammatical issues are sorta in tune with the nature of poems, so you're good there. I wish I knew any second language fluently so I could write poetry like this...

[Mixman]

Hello, my Quichie!
How are you?
Are you still gurgling a little bit?
And your surface is still as good?

I have long been with you in separation.
And if you forgive me,
I again would like to stumble, as for the first time,
In your depths with a chomping sound.

And this time, I can not escape from you!
I'm all in you, I'm all burned!
And you will caress me,
While I love you whisper.

While your sucking dirt,
It will not take me to your depths.
I will be near...
I'm with you...

[Solrex]

And this time, I can not escape from you!
I'm all in you, I'm all burned!
And you will caress me,
While I love you whisper.

While your sucking dirt,
It will not take me to your depths.
I will be near...
I'm with you...

Wow, this is powerful. Very enjoyable read. I lose the idea of the mire whispering sweet nothings into my ear as I plunge deeper and deeper into a muddy trap that becomes harder and harder to escape, and the difficulty only matches the hardness of my growing erection. Completely stuck and unable to escape without outside help. And this is poetry; it's amazing what you can do with just a few words.

[Mixman]

And this time, I can not escape from you!
I'm all in you, I'm all burned!
And you will caress me,
While I love you whisper.

While your sucking dirt,
It will not take me to your depths.
I will be near...
I'm with you...

Wow, this is powerful. Very enjoyable read. I lose the idea of the mire whispering sweet nothings into my ear as I plunge deeper and deeper into a muddy trap that becomes harder and harder to escape, and the difficulty only matches the hardness of my growing erection. Completely stuck and unable to escape without outside help. And this is poetry; it's amazing what you can do with just a few words.

Thanks!